Revision Improvements:
After looking into Phoebe and Aivlin’s stories there are a few tweaks I want to make to my own story here and there. While looking at Phoebe’s story I was instantly grabbed into the stories setting just from the theme, with the light pink and cursive font on some of the headings it was easy to tell the story would have some form in dance or more specifically ballet. For my story, I definetely would want to go back and change the theme of my story, maybe by adding more warm colors or finding a map that resembles more of a postcard, like a vacation theme? Something more than just red and white! When I looked at Aivlin’s story I actually felt relief, in my story I really wanted to write a larger amount of story into mine, I can’t help but write so much detail in my own stories. After seeing both of their stories I realized I don’t have to worry about writing “too much” because writing to the whole is creating the whole story itself.
Collection –> “What’s Your Favorite Family Place-Based Story?”
My favorite example of a family place-based story is probably the laundry mat from the film Everything Everywhere All at Once, the laundry mat is more than just a place where the family works with their business. The laundry mat represents topics like generational trauma, finanical struggle, or emotional distress. This place shows the audience the beginning of their story, start from end. At the end of the story, instead of the laundry mat being their main mean of surivival, to them it finally becomes more at home to them.