Progress
I have added a narrative component to the story project, showing a progression of the narrator’s character from jadedness and cynicism toward their old hometown, to a newfound appreciation for its better aspects and the memories they made there. That’s the one piece that the previous drafts were missing, so I added it to make the whole project feel more like a story in the traditional sense.
I incorporated the narrative piece into the photo sidecar, with solid-color slides that progress from dark to light to reflect the narrator’s changing attitude.
What I Need Feedback On
I need feedback on if my final approach to this story appropriately combines a narrative with the smaller pieces like the poetry and trivia. To me, it still feels somewhat disjointed, like I could have combined the different aspects of the document more smoothly.