Reading Ashley’s first draft gives me ideas to use present day devices in my story. Even though my story doesn’t take place in recent times. I’m sure the early generations on the space station has passed down stuff to family members to remember time before the space station.
Parker Gray NMD 443 March 18, 2024 Task 7 The sun dipped low, casting a warm glow across campus as I sat outside the adjacent bodega in the car I’d owned since I was 16. Ethan, grinning ear to ear after successfully acquiring a 30 pack of beer with his botched fake id, was
My grandmother was like a lamp. Her very presence would warm a room and invite you to sit next to her on the green arm chair. When my grandmother was around it always meant time spent together, sweet remarks, and always a cup of tea. Once she passed away, it felt like her curtains would
The pink and gold colors covered the sky in the dream embrace of morning as Alex found himself exploring the halls of a dream that kept coming back to him, a place where his imagination was unlimited. His hands created beautiful landscapes and fantastical animals; they reminded me like dancing brushes. His younger self was
In darkness, there is the sound of something flying through the air and then an explosion from impact. “These noises, why are they haunting me?” The darkness erupts into a scene of a battlefield. A hooded figure wielding a huge glowing sword stands on a ledge looking over a rocken field. Armored orcs, followed by
My phone rings just after midnight but I’m not asleep. Infact, I’m barely in my pj’s yet as the second I came home from work, I grabbed my journal and got right back to work again. I put the journal down and checked the screen. It’s Derrick. Derrick: Can’t sleep. You up? Me: Is
Self Revision I think I may need to dive deeper into why X-24 his program is messing up likeemphasize the moments where he begins to question the righteousness of his missions and showcase the evolving self-awareness I feel like I may need to describe Captain Sable’s actions or characteristics that challenge X-24’s programmed beliefs, gradually leading
The First Draft–Feedback & Revision If a teacher told me to revise, I thought that meant my writing was a broken-down car that needed to go to the repair shop. I felt insulted. I didn’t realize the teacher was saying, ‘Make it shine. It’s worth it.’ Now I see revision as a beautiful word of